In the last draft I had a large rejig of the essay as some parts in the middle suited better to being the introduction and what I wrote as the intro was better suited in context and themes
break up essay, paragraphs are long make shorter better for you and reader to understand
some sentences are ong winded, break up with comma or make shorter.
need to fix a lot of capitals, and grammar
when talking about refrnce biut not quoting do it like this Riley (2002)
comment on case studies and compare and contrast them to back up point.
write conclusion.
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